Opinions?

[Mhtro]

I am making a thread design for my Upcoming design agency.
I try to make a unique thread design with a unique colour scheme, this is what I've done so far!
I would love some constructive criticism and how I could improve it.
(Got the idea from something I saw on the web)

 

[Marek]

I don't like the jump from thin to bold on " Do you want to impress your clients " If the font has multiple weights, try regular to semi bold or thin to semi bold.

 

[Mhtro]

I don't like the jump from thin to bold on " Do you want to impress your clients " If the font has multiple weights, try regular to semi bold or thin to semi bold.

Does this look better?

 

[Marek]

Does this look better?

Yea